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Revising your writing

Let’s review the writing process.

After you write a draft, it is time to revise your writing. When we revise our writing, we can make it even better by adding more details and changing words.

Steps of the writing process

Think about what you would like to write about, your topic, and come up with ideas!

Take some time to gather your thoughts and then write them on paper.

Make your writing better by rereading what you have. Add more details and change anything you want.

Correct your work! Double check your spelling, grammar, capitalization, and punctuation.

Make it neat and share! Get ready to share your literary masterpiece!

You may wish to keep a copy of the steps as a reference. Access the following printable document Steps of the Writing Process so you can remember the steps. You can also write out the steps in your notebook.

Press the ‘Activity’ button to access Steps of the Writing Process. 

Activity (Open PDF in a new window)

Student Success

Think-Pair-Share

Here are three pictures. Which picture helps you tell a story with more detail? Why? Why did you choose this picture?

Note to teachers: See your teacher guide for collaboration tools, ideas and suggestions.

In this learning activity, we are going to learn different ways to revise our writing.

Action

Parts of speech: nouns, verbs and adjectives

It is important to know the different parts of speech so that you can:

  • write sentences that make sense
  • use the best words to show how you feel about a topic

Noun

A noun is a person, place or thing. Access the following episode of Homework Zone, where Teacher Wynne tells you more about nouns.

Can you identify which words are nouns in the following sentences? .

  • A school is for learning.
  • A playground is for playing.
  • We have a playground at our school.

Press the ‘Where is the Noun?’ button to check your answers.

A school is for learning.

A playground is for playing.

We have a playground at our school.

Verb

A verb is an action word. Access the following episode of Homework Zone, where Teacher Wynne gives tips on how to identify a verb.

Can you identify which words are verbs in the following sentences?

  • Our Aunty taught us the song.
  • The doctor gave me a flu shot.
  • The police officer stopped the cars.

Press the ‘Where is the Verb?’ button to check your answers.

Our Aunty taught us the song.

The doctor gave me a flu shot.

The police officer stopped the cars.

Adjective

We can use special describing words, called adjectives, to make our writing even more interesting. To learn more about adjectives, access the following episode of Homework Zone.

Let’s add some adjectives to the sentences to make them more interesting!

  • The firefighter put out the fire.
  • The park has swings and a slide.
  • The nurse helped.

Student Tips

Revising a draft

Use the following checklist to help you while you revise your draft.

Revising Checklist

Examine the following draft “The Library.” Revise the writing. Use the revising checklist to help!

The Library

On Tuesday our class went to library. We did not there were so many things to do. We could read books We could play games. We could use technology. We could look movies and video games. There is lots to do at the library.

A library building

Student Success

Think-Pair-Share

Examine the following draft “The Nurse.” If possible, work with a partner to revise the writing. Use the revising checklist to help!

The Nurse

Nurses are important. They help people. They are hospitals. They are in schools. They do things like give shots. I don't like shots because they hurt. They always helping. Nurses are great. One day, I could be one.

A group of smiling nurses

Note to teachers: See your teacher guide for collaboration tools, ideas and suggestions.

Consolidation

Your turn: writing

We have learned about many important people and places in our community.

Our family, friends, teachers, nurses, Elders and police officers are the people in our community that help us.

In this activity, think about one person in your community that helps you. In two or three sentences describe what they do to help.

Student Success

Think-Pair-Share

It’s time to revise your draft. Use the Revision Checklist to help you.

Revision Checklist

When you’re ready, share your work with a partner or make a recording. Think back to the success criteria. What is one thing you like about the sentence? What would you do differently next time?

If you are working with a partner, use the words:

  • “I like the way you…”
  • “Next time you could…”

Then, take turns revising the writing.

Note to teachers: See your teacher guide for collaboration tools, ideas and suggestions.

Reflection

How do you feel about what you have learned in this activity?  Which of the next four sentences best matches how you are feeling about your learning? Press the button that is beside this sentence.

I feel...

Now, record your ideas about your feelings using a voice recorder, speech-to-text, or writing tool.